TASK- come up with 12 Openers that will grab readers and make them want to read on. They will be the best you can think of, and they will all be written in the third person and the present tense. Use the descriptive voice, but don’t add silly words for no reason.

1.”Mummy! Daddy’s vomitting again!” Albert shouts and looks in his mother’s direction. His mother, who wears a worried look on her face, is whispering to one of the air stewardesses, trying to get the captain out.

2.The sound of the waves wakes Bernard up from his nap. He looks around. The beach is still teeming with people. Clinton is nowhere to be seen. Bernard can make out someone swimming strongly against the waves. “Clinton! Come back!” he shouts. The sound of the waves drowns out his voice.

3.The sun drops below the horizon and darkness slowly starts to set in.

4.”Did you hear what happened?” A high-pitched voice breaks the peaceful morning silence of the usual loud and bustling food centre.

5.A plump little man is crouching in front of David’s neighbour’s door. What’s with him is a large bat and a small metal bar called a screwdriver.

6.Darkness surrounds Eunice. Only the cold, hard concrete for her to stare at and only the faint echo of her throbbing heart can be heard. The same question keep popping up in her head over and over agin. “What exactly happened that night?”

7.Slouching on the sofa in the living room, Fernando flips through television channels with a remote control, hoping that there will be a programme that is interesting enough to attract his attention. Suddenly, his finger pauses.

8.All eyes are on Gina the minute she steps into the court room for the second time. She wipes droplets of perspiration on her forehead. She takes some steady and yet shaky steps as she approaches her seat. The courtroom is like a hive full of buzzing bees. 

9.”Justice is served,” declares Superman proudly as he watches the bad bald guy being whisked away into the police officer’s car with his shoulders straight and his arms akimbo.

10.”Stop! Stop hitting me!” Herman recalls from his dreadful memory as he sees a boy being beaten up by his father in public. 

11.Ian’s father has passed away, battling with cancer for a short period of time. His mother’s pillar of strength is gone. She starts drinking to kill away the pain of her loss but it only makes it worse.

12.”Help! Help me!” Jeanette hears that loud and clear voice. She frantically searchs for the voice as it is becoming softer and softer.

One Comment

    • theredpants
    • Posted April 28, 2008 at 6:54 am
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    Generally okay. There are some that are too general (Number 3) which open up too many possibilities for story and some that are too specific (Number 11) that hold only a few, if not one possibility for story. Try and hit somewhere in the middle of that range and you’ll be fine.


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